Hi Jackson,
Here are a couple of Ray's emails, I think you can use them to help you get your wording down.
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Dear Doug:
There doesn't seem to be one orthodox Christian in the world who understands that what the King James calls "eternal life" should be translated "eonian life" (or "age-abiding life") because the verses that speak of eonian life have nothing whatsoever to do with LIVING FOREVER. Eonian is a special REWARD and GIFT from God and has to do with rulership in His Kingdom, not with HOW LONG we will live. The eons (or ages) come to an end (I Cor. 15:24-25), therefore, our reigning over the nations with Jesus will also end.
What then? Do we DIE, as many teachers and Christians have foolishly insisted would have to be the outcome of "eonian life?" No, we do not DIE, but we do not die because God gave us "eternal life." Nowhere does it say God gives anyone "eternal life." The reason we don't die after the eons is because God has given us "IMMORTALITY (I Cor. 15:53).
Certainly our salvation IS eternal, its just that the Bible nowhere says its "eternal," but rather that we are given "immortality." Therefore it is WRONG to translate a word into "eternal" when it doesn't mean "eternal," even though after the eonian life, falsely called eternal life, ends. I've explained this many times on our site along with analogies to help clarify it. You really need to read all the material on our site if you want to know ALL that we teach on our site.
God be with you,
Ray
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Comment: The concept of "eternity" is foreign to the Holy Scriptures. There is virtually nothing that is outside of the time periods known as aions. There are just a couple of hints regarding life beyond the ages of time. Luke speaks of things pertaining to the Kingdom, not coming to an end. And Paul tells us that in resurrection we will have "incorruption" and "immortality" signifying "deathlessness," but neither word has to do with time itself. Paul also speaks of a time in which God will be "ALL in all." That is the extent to which the Scriptures even hint of eternity or anything beyond the ages of time.
II Cor. 4:18 is neither speaking of "deathless" or "everlasting," as you suggest. It is speaking of what is happening now, in our life of flesh, and what will happen during the ages of our reign with Christ in the kingdom of God. The things of this life, we SEE daily. The things pertaining to the Kingdom of God are as yet "NOT seen." Again, it is not even speaking of what is "visible" and "Invisible," but rather what is NOW SEEN as compared with things "eonian" and NOT YET SEEN, which when seen will not be temporary, but will last through whole eons of time. And all that is perfected through the Kingdom of God and the reign of Christ bringing all enemies into subjection, will last on PAST the eons, and will have NO END.
The next great event in prophecy is not eternity, but rather the END of this eon and the BEGINNING of the next—the one in which the very elect will reign with Christ. There is no sense in jumping into eternity when as yet, we have numerous ages to yet live and administer God’s government and His Great Judgment. And so, what is not yet seen, is "eonian" (pertaining to the eons), and not "eternity" as you and the King James suggests in this verse."
God be with you,
Ray
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mercy, peace, and love
Kat